Comin' to the Rescue! Fifth Retake

AndersonT : For some unknown reason, I decided to remake the infamous novel A New Tale of Toby Coreman Episode 3. For those who want a recap or a summary, you can use the Dōa-nu'tz tag to browse through all those nice abyss black history.
So to sum it up it's basically

• First original version. Written on scraps. Undeniably crappy everything.
• Second Brown notebook version. Enhanced, added fillers, and richer story.
• Third Microsoft Word version. Great improvements in sentence structure Compared to the first version. (its actually still terrible) And more extensions but story couldn't go farther than 2nd version.
• Fourth version but it's more like 3.5. Mainly spelling and grammar fixes. Typed out all the unreached 2nd version, and a brief after story and spoilers.

And this is the fifth version. In this version I would like to do a few things

• Update the whole Dōa-nu'tz lore. That means changing lots of names, and even parts of stories to make it match with other newer stories.
• Over enhancing the scenarios. Some places simply needs more description because they are not pictures. And even then I won't do justice compared to pro writers.
• Deep characters. In order to make a deep story, you need deep characters! What I should do is, just get a very basic idea, and from there, branch out details. For example, throw in a character in some situation. What will he do and why. bring two characters, and imagine what will happen. Be creative and combine everything to anything. You don't make characters story! Characters make your story! ... maybe
• The whole plot. Actually it's too late at this point. Change the story, and the Dōa-nu'tz won't be a Dōa-nu'tz. At least the deep characters can fill some plot holes.
• Actually END THE STORY all the way to the end. No further explanation needed.

Okay I let you wait too long. Here's the part 1. Hopefully more will come. Part 2 is currently underway.

Part1
Update 2018/03/04 Part2
 Chapter numbers are in a bit of mess. Stay not so tuned for updates and fixes

2022/10/31 Edit

Whole story is compiled here NAO!